Talk:HMS Euphrates (1813)
Latest comment: 10 months ago by Pickersgill-Cunliffe in topic GA Review
HMS Euphrates (1813) has been listed as one of the Warfare good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it. Review: December 30, 2023. (Reviewed version). |
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Reviewer: Vami IV (talk · contribs) 16:25, 29 December 2023 (UTC)
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editIf I have demonstrated incompetence or caused offense, please let me know. –♠Vamí_IV†♠ 16:25, 29 December 2023 (UTC)
Prose review
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[...] and so more were needed to be built.
Seems to me redundant.
- Removed.
[...] Scamander class was one of those put into construction to fill this need.
"one of those"? One of those what? I think some specificity or reduction is required here.
- Removed.
As such Alpheus's class [...]
whomst
- Not sure what you mean here?
- Alpheus isn't a name used before in the article; is this a ghost from a previous article? –♠Vamí_IV†♠ 01:14, 30 December 2023 (UTC)
- Haha I didn't even catch that when reading it through again! Yes, from a previous article for a ship of the class.
[...] a woman at Corfu.
Suggest "on" Corfu, considering it's an island rather than a city.
- Changed.
Ten days after receiving the first news of Exmouth [...]
Suggest "first despatch", as "of Exmouth" here makes him sound like an event unto himself.
- Reworded.
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- @Vami IV: Hi, thanks for reviewing this! I've responded above, with one unactioned point that I've queried. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 16:47, 29 December 2023 (UTC)
- @Vami IV: Responded above...oops! Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 01:25, 30 December 2023 (UTC)
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.