User contributions for Dennis Bratland

9 November 2024

• 23:3623:36, 9 November 2024 diff hist −19 Alfonso Cuarón →Personal life: Being a vegetarian is not more important than his marriages and children, nor social causes. current Tags: Mobile edit Mobile web edit Advanced mobile edit
• 23:2223:22, 9 November 2024 diff hist −380 Alfonso Cuarón →Style: Extremely extraordinarily wordy. No need for so much filler Tags: Mobile edit Mobile web edit Advanced mobile edit

1 August 2024

• 20:0520:05, 1 August 2024 diff hist +145 Little Misfortune →Reception: gameplay is the most useless term. It just means the playing the game. Instead of saying "the gameplay is X" say "the game is X". But whatever. Unsourced and confusing.

20 July 2024

• 02:4302:43, 20 July 2024 diff hist −4 Vulnerability scanner Utilized is pompous and adds no meaning. Just say used Tags: Mobile edit Mobile web edit Advanced mobile edit

14 July 2024

• 23:5423:54, 14 July 2024 diff hist −4 The Lincoln Lawyer (TV series) →Recurring: Utilizing = using + 2 unnecessary syllables Tags: Mobile edit Mobile web edit Advanced mobile edit
• 01:5901:59, 14 July 2024 diff hist +12 Members Only (fashion brand) →Cultural influence: If it's trivial, delete it. This content describes the broader cultural impact, analysis and opinion by significant pundits or scholars. Cultural influence is an accurate heading Tags: Mobile edit Mobile web edit Advanced mobile edit

25 June 2024

• 18:5218:52, 25 June 2024 diff hist +7 Sichuan cuisine →Theories of origin: Controversy means two or more factions are in dispute. Having more than one theory about the distant past is normal, not controversial Tags: Mobile edit Mobile web edit Advanced mobile edit
• 18:4718:47, 25 June 2024 diff hist +94 Sichuan cuisine →Category: Tagged confusing paragraphs. Perhaps weak translation, or some prior material was deleted? Tags: Mobile edit Mobile web edit Advanced mobile edit

10 April 2024

• 20:5220:52, 10 April 2024 diff hist +863 User talk:Dennis Bratland →Titanic passengers: yes maybe probably perhaps but who can predict the future?

3 April 2024

• 21:3621:36, 3 April 2024 diff hist +847 Talk:Roller derby →Lapping?: it can be too complicated for a Wikipedia article

29 March 2024

• 17:4217:42, 29 March 2024 diff hist +18 Silencer (firearms) →History: the drawing at least resembles a silencer, though I'm no engineer or patent lawyer. A secondary source should support this claim.
• 17:4017:40, 29 March 2024 diff hist +230 Silencer (firearms) →History: I should probably just delete this. A patent is a primary source, and the inventor's claims that his weird box thing could be adapted are speculative and not objective. Find a good secondary source that says this.
• 17:3617:36, 29 March 2024 diff hist +87 Silencer (firearms) →History: what?

21 March 2024

• 21:0921:09, 21 March 2024 diff hist +529 Islabikes update tense, closure dates, rm linkspam, editorializing, rm uncredited copy-paste of direct quote.

17 October 2023

• 04:4604:46, 17 October 2023 diff hist −64 White Hills (band) So much fan love. Needs an objective editorial tone. If you want superlatives you need to directly cite in text quotes from reputable critics Tags: Mobile edit Mobile web edit Advanced mobile edit
• 04:4004:40, 17 October 2023 diff hist −10 White Hills (band) →Movie Credits: Calm down. Encyclopedic tone. Tags: Mobile edit Mobile web edit Advanced mobile edit

20 September 2023

• 23:5123:51, 20 September 2023 diff hist −27 Cooling tower Web page formatting doesn’t guarantee where an image will appear without significant forced formatting. If you want the body text to refer to a specific image you need to put a hard break above it, but really, don’t. Tags: Mobile edit Mobile web edit Advanced mobile edit

3 September 2023

• 05:4305:43, 3 September 2023 diff hist +9 Bang Energy →Legal actions and controversy: “Received controversy”? What is that? Tags: Mobile edit Mobile web edit Advanced mobile edit

22 May 2023

• 19:5019:50, 22 May 2023 diff hist −9 Fort Ross, California We know it’s notable because it’s in the article. It’s so notable you put it in the lead. See WP:NOTED Tags: Reverted Mobile edit Mobile web edit

6 April 2023

• 23:4723:47, 6 April 2023 diff hist +12 Sunglasses →Other precursors: How does one write a stock phrase like “it is said” without wondering who said it? If you don’t know who, why did you say it? Tags: Mobile edit Mobile web edit

30 March 2023

• 17:0717:07, 30 March 2023 diff hist −161 Indian agent only need to link to dept of war, dept of interior once
• 17:0417:04, 30 March 2023 diff hist +1 Indian agent clarify what the 1793 law was. "History" is another vague section title that doesn't tell us anything we didn't already know
• 16:5616:56, 30 March 2023 diff hist −39 Indian agent since the article already linked Bureau of Indian Affairs three times, a fourth link in see also is a bit much. In fact, we really only need to link to anything once.
• 16:5116:51, 30 March 2023 diff hist +27 Indian agent →Background: section titles like "background" convey zero information. Why even waste page space with words that say nothing? Be better off with no section header at all and just a paragraph following the intro. Or use a title that matches the content of the section, because that's something the reader doesn't know.

25 March 2023

• 23:4523:45, 25 March 2023 diff hist +1 Roller derby Undid revision 1146615327 by Dennis Bratland (talk) no, actually this article has two history sections. Fixing that will require a major overhaul. Tag: Undo
• 23:4323:43, 25 March 2023 diff hist −1 Roller derby →Overview: everything in this section is about the origins and development of roller derby, leaving out everything else. It should be called "history" Tag: Reverted

21 March 2023

• 17:5717:57, 21 March 2023 diff hist +543 Roller derby using scrimmage this way isn't wrong but it's confusing because there are the other kind of scrimmages in derby. The whole sentence is confusing; role of penalty box is important.
• 17:0017:00, 21 March 2023 diff hist −36 Roller derby As with Basketball and American football, it's more important to lead with how many are on the track at a time, not the total size of the roster. Different leagues have different roster sizes, but 5 on the track is basically the norm.

20 March 2023

• 19:5119:51, 20 March 2023 diff hist +2,010 Talk:Yamaha FJR1300 →Original research?: mostly from forum posts, also they emailed me

16 March 2023

• 18:5218:52, 16 March 2023 diff hist −6 Action-adventure game see WP:BOLDTITLE

15 March 2023

• 00:3500:35, 15 March 2023 diff hist −34 Honda Super Cub Restored revision 1142288537 by Andethyst (talk): There's no policy saying we have to keep baseless facts and merely add citation needed.That's an option, but if it's utterly baseless, removal is preferred. See WP:BURDEN Tags: Twinkle Undo

13 March 2023

• 18:3418:34, 13 March 2023 diff hist −34 m Jamestown, Illinois Reverted 1 edit by 205.175.137.1 (talk) to last revision by Shelkovitsa Tags: Twinkle Undo

6 March 2023

• 18:5318:53, 6 March 2023 diff hist −6 Brainstorming →Applications: See wp:noted Tags: Mobile edit Mobile web edit
• 18:5118:51, 6 March 2023 diff hist −3 Brainstorming →Two principles: See wp:claim Tags: Mobile edit Mobile web edit

27 January 2023

• 20:0120:01, 27 January 2023 diff hist −95 .300 AAC Blackout →History: 5.56×45mm NATO finds joy in nothing, I’m afraid. The M4 and M16 are atrocious hosts. It’s especially awkward to use this odd metaphor in the same sentence as “a host of cartridges”. It’s not necessary to be this wordy or this flowery. Just say it. Tags: Mobile edit Mobile web edit
• 19:5119:51, 27 January 2023 diff hist +14 .300 AAC Blackout WL silencer, utilize is a 3 syllable word that means use Tags: Mobile edit Mobile web edit

26 January 2023

• 02:2802:28, 26 January 2023 diff hist +19 Anthropocene Working Group Reads like a press release Tags: Mobile edit Mobile web edit
• 02:2702:27, 26 January 2023 diff hist −254 Anthropocene Working Group →Media: See WP:ELNO external links in article. Also mostly promotional not reliable sources Tags: Mobile edit Mobile web edit

24 January 2023

• 21:3021:30, 24 January 2023 diff hist +1,076 N User talk:2601:441:4D00:5960:F927:4B2E:30C8:A05C General note: Unconstructive editing on Talk:Ex Machina (film) ‎. current Tag: Twinkle
• 21:2821:28, 24 January 2023 diff hist −468 Talk:Ex Machina (film) Restored revision 1129739895 by Philoserf (talk): Rvv Tags: Twinkle Undo

28 December 2022

• 23:0923:09, 28 December 2022 diff hist −307 Lestat de Lioncourt unlink common English terms like "performing", "violin", "rock band" etc. Simple English Wikipedia is there for readers who are unfamiliar with commonplace words. see MOS:OVERLINK Tag: Disambiguation links added
• 22:4922:49, 28 December 2022 diff hist −8 Lestat de Lioncourt →Relationships with other characters: unlink major geographic features

24 December 2022

• 21:4021:40, 24 December 2022 diff hist −4 Marcel the Shell with Shoes On (2021 film) →Accolades: revealed? Was it a secret?

15 November 2022

• 06:2406:24, 15 November 2022 diff hist +47 Champagne Papi (Atlanta) →Plot: Wordy, imprecise. Tags: Mobile edit Mobile web edit

8 November 2022

• 04:4304:43, 8 November 2022 diff hist +12 Dan Harmon →The Sirens of Titan and Krapopolis (2022): Citation makes no mention of anyone announcing anything to anybody. Maybe the source was working from a press release? But from whom? The fact that this has to be written in passive voice is a red flag. Tags: Mobile edit Mobile web edit

3 November 2022

• 19:0319:03, 3 November 2022 diff hist +1,709 Talk:Minecraft →Minecraft Redstone: sources? see WP:NOT and WP:VG/CONTENT
• 04:2204:22, 3 November 2022 diff hist −68 Mortynight Run See WP:SAID. All these euphemisms for “said” are just editors slipping in their opinions. Also “analyzed that..” isn’t even wrong. Analyzed requires a direct object. Tags: Visual edit Mobile edit Mobile web edit

29 October 2022

• 23:1523:15, 29 October 2022 diff hist −8 m Talk:Cuban Missile Crisis →Jupiters were "nearly-obsolete missiles"? I have a few questions.: not trident
• 22:5922:59, 29 October 2022 diff hist −201 Cuban Missile Crisis It's misleading to simply label the Jupiter missiles as obsolete. See Talk:Cuban_Missile_Crisis#Jupiters_were_"nearly-obsolete_missiles"?_I_have_a_few_questions., Better to leave it out now and only mention it will the full context and details later.
• 22:5122:51, 29 October 2022 diff hist +5,110 Talk:Cuban Missile Crisis →Jupiters were "nearly-obsolete missiles"? I have a few questions.: answers to some of my questions