Talk:Eli Whiteside/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 21:06, 30 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this article shortly. Wizardman 21:06, 30 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Here are the issues I found:

Any more on his college baseball career? Delta State's not going to have a huge amount of info since it's D-II, so if there's nothing then that's fine.
"He appeared in six games, making two important throwing errors before" perhaps say what the errors were and go into a bit of detail about them rather than just say "important" since then that's just opinion.
"but he remained in spring training with the Orioles until they made their final cuts on April 1." maybe make it clearer that he was demote/sent to Ottawa at that time.
"Before the 2008 season, Whiteside signed a contract with the Minnesota Twins." adding in a date could be helpful here.
I don't think the year subsections are needed in the Giants section, since the paragraphs aren't overly long.
"In 2010, for the first time in his career, Whiteside made an MLB team (the Giants) out of spring training." having the Giants in parentheses seems redundant.
"he was on the team's roster, throughout the playoffs" rm comma
"He was non tendered after the season" could we have a link for non-tendered? I know what it means, but non-baseball guys probably will have no idea.
He was claimed off waivers by the Blue Jays and the Rangers almost immediately afterward. What exactly happened there; was he DFA'd by Toronto too or was there something else involved?
"The two welcomed their first child, Whittington "Whit" Jackson Whiteside, in February 2010." getting a bit non-encyclopedic, just say they had a child.
The article in general feels a bit stat-heavy. Look around and see if you can find anything to make it more balanced. It's not easy to work around with a baseball article but see if you can.

I'll put the article on hold and will pass when the issues are fixed. Wizardman 01:45, 2 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Everything looks good now, so I'll pass the article. Wizardman 14:37, 2 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]